Kaiden is Incredibly "tall!" for his age and skinny like a tree , and has long lanky legs. His hair is like long grass on his head. He’s very funny and most of the time looks as lost like a baby.
In free time , he likes to draw and is very amazing at it. Things he likes to do is play games , play rugby , and hang out with me. He is very good at fixing things up . Math is highest intelligences during class time . Making jokes and listening to music is what he likes to do in boring times. He is also extremely talented in sports . Strategy's are his strong points in a lot of physical activity's!
What I enjoy doing with Kaiden is when he is sleeping at my house because we always make each other laugh and we play a lot games. We like playing rugby in my back yard and laughing , and riding our bikes.
My friendship with Kaiden is very well balanced. We hardly ever fight or ever argue. We treat each other the way we want to be treated and we have a lot of fun.
This is cool Lepa, you have really captured the essence of Kaiden and your friendship in this writing. It made me laugh and smile as I read it which is what good writing should do.
ReplyDeleteIf you varied your sentence beginnings in your paragraphs you could make this event better.
Nice job Lepa, I'd love to see an animation of you and your mate!
Mrs Nua
Thank You Mrs Nua for your helpful comments. I will change my beging of my sentences.
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ReplyDeleteNice writing you have I really enjoyed reading about Kaiden from your point of you. I enjoy hanging out with him as much as you do, unlike Kaiden me and you fight and argue some times too huh ?.
Keep up the good work
Cruz:)
Hi that was a nice writing about you and your friend kaiden. Your right kaiden is a tall boy and I like talking with him.
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By Ioritana